My College Application Essays

Those are my college application essay.  It is not worth it to copy it since we are different as human being and my blog has copy right 🙂 .  I hope this help you with your college application.

1:Please describe how you have prepared for your intended major, including your readiness to succeed in your upper-division courses once you enroll at the university.

After graduating from high school, I did not know what I wanted to do in my life. Shortly after I began college, a friend who was a senior software engineer at Google took me to Oracle OpenWorld which sparked my passion for Computer Science. Since then, I have done all I can to prepare myself for a degree in that field. I have dedicated myself to my programming and math classes and have received straight A’s. From those classes, I learned computer languages such as C++ and Java. More generally, I learned how computers “think”. I feel so ready and excited to move on to upper divisions classes. I have also prepared myself by volunteering on a web development project in the Mathematics Engineering Science Achievement (MESA) program, where I made a significant improvement to the search engine that MESA students use to search for scholarships. I also created an internal forum where students can tutor each other online. In summer 2016, I was an intern at a software startup called Ebo box, the world’s first artificial intelligence-driven gifting experience. From that, I learned a lot about the software industry in the Bay Area and Silicon Valley which has helped me understand what my classes are preparing me for. I always have enjoyed logical thinking, and in high school, I was recognized for my problem-solving skills and represented my city in national math competitions. I was in the top ten in a national contest. Computer Science is a perfect fit for me because it is like literature in science form and requires problem-solving skills and creativity. Not only do I have a love for the field, but I also have the discipline to study long hours and maintain my focus and dedication. I know how, when, and where to asked for help when I need it, including speaking with my professors. I never give up.

2: Describe an example of your leadership experience in which you have positively influenced others, helped resolve disputes, or contributed to group efforts over time.

I contributed to others and been a leader after I was selected by a group of faculty and students to represent the Civic Center campus and be a voice for ESL students when City College of San Francisco (CCSF) was faced with severe budget cuts. In Spring of 2015, when the Civic Civic Center campus was under a risk of being shut down, I attended meetings with San Francisco non-profit groups and gave speeches on the importance of keeping open the Civic Center Campus in the Tenderloin district because of the crucial role it played in serving that large immigrant community. After that, I created an event called “Let Our Voices Be Heard.” I encouraged ESL students to write letters about the need for the campus in their education. The purpose of the event was to let the Board of Supervisors know the importance of the Civic Center campus for the students of the Tenderloin. On November 12, 2016, with support from faculty and students, I led more than forty students on a peaceful March from the Civic Center Campus to San Francisco City Hall where we held a rally. This event is one of the main factors that led to a strike of all CCSF campuses on April 27th, 2016. We struck to stop the cuts, support a fair contract for our CCSF instructors, and maintain the school’s accreditation. Even though the Tenderloin Campus did not survive, we did help the faculty and helped CCSF survive and now continue to find other ways to help the students from the Tenderloin. Today, as an ESL student representative, I make sure that our ESL students have a strong voice. I have moved on to credit classes and study on the main campus of CCSF where I help non-credit students in their process of transferring from non-credit to credit classes. I am also an ESL student to student advisor who helps students from the Civic Center campus adapt and get used to their new learning environment.

3:Describe the most significant challenge you have faced and the steps you have taken to overcome this challenge. How has this challenge affected your academic achievement?

The most significant challenge in my life was immigrating to the U.S. with my family when I was seventeen without knowing English. For the first six months, my family did not have any income, and we were very poor, living on the aid of my aunt and government assistance. Being under eighteen made it extra difficult to find a job; thus, I did not have money to pay for my daily expenses let alone go to school. Not knowing English, I experienced culture shock and depression. I did not know what to do with my life. I knew school was important, but I did not know where to go or how to enroll. All my friends were in Vietnam, so I had no one to share my feelings with. I was homesick and missed my previous life. For the first year, I cried a lot. I cried because of how lonely I felt. I cried because of seeing my parents in their fifties still needing to work physical jobs and extra shifts. I was depressed and wondered if it would be easier if I just disappeared or moved back to Vietnam. But, I did not give up. I convinced myself that the American Dream was big enough for anyone, including myself. I knew if I worked hard enough, I would get ahead and that education was the key. The day I turned eighteen, I tried to find a job so that I could contribute to my family and save up for school. I eventually found a job working the graveyard shift at a warehouse which allowed me to save money and go to school during the day. I began taking the lowest level ESL classes even though it was very hard and I felt tired most of the time. After a year and a half in non-credit class, I moved on to credit classes and eventually found my way towards a successful educational path. In time, I also made friends and became happily adjusted to American life. Now, I feel a sense of belonging.

4: Beyond what has already been shared in your application, what do you believe makes you stand out as a strong candidate for admissions to the University of California? (I am so proud of this essay T_T)

At a young age, my parents always taught me that I deserved the best in life and not to settle for anything less. Thus, I do not wait for things to happen to me, I make things happen. For example, as a kid, I asked my parents let me live near my grandmother so I could be closer to school. When I was in middle school, I choose to go to a bigger school away from my hometown because it was more competitive. After high school, I had two choices: either go to Taiwan and have an easy college life or go to the US for greater opportunities and challenges. I chose the later. Coming to America was indeed a great challenge that required me to be proactive to make the most of it. First, I found a job and then I found out how to enroll in free ESL classes. As school became more advanced with credit classes, I reached out to counselors for personal and academic guidance. I made friends and create a support network for myself. Even though I loved and missed my hometown, I did not isolate myself from American society. Instead, I pushed myself out of my comfort zone, so that I could enjoy life to the fullest. Most importantly, I had the courage to come out the closet to my family and friends so that I could fully be who I am instead of who other people wanted me to be. I came to America speaking no English, in the closet, with no knowledge of the culture and with no one to guide me. Now I feel the world is open to me with no limit. In fact, I even have expanded my international outlook by traveling independently to Latin American and Myanmar. I am a person who never allows myself to get too comfortable and content. I always seek out ways to get to the next level and dream up new dreams. I do not wait for opportunities to present myself, I create opportunities where and when I see fit.

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